Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion
Music is one of the intrinsic parts of our daily life. It is considered by some that music can unit people from all walks, ages, creeds and cultures. In my view point, music can narrate story of a different ethnics freely and unbiased, so, it can be used as an effective instrument to enhance oneness among people. In the subsequent paragraphs, I articulate my reasons.
To begin with, music is a kind of art which is connected to our soul. It can broaden the horizon of people about other cultures. It honestly song about heroes and their achievements from ancient time till now. Identifying values of other ethnics can allows individuals to gain access to large reservoir of unbiased information and discoveries which both together would impact the ties between cultures.
Music differs from culture to culture. This is partly because our ancestors found out about its role in conducting people. Music can changes your feelings and emotions toward any matter. It is a very strong instrument which can incourages, learns, belames and punishs you just by using simple world and song. With that in mind, it can diminishs prejudices among people and gather them all together without considering their nationalities, ages and religions.
To wrap it up, I swear by that music can reduces conflicts and enhance oneness among people, but it totally depends on its conductor purpose. It can be observed in the some countries that it used to political purpose. Fortunately, by updating the technology, people have awared about the role of music. It prevents the mislead and helps to increase the good use of music.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: reduce
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, honestly, if, so, kind of, in my view, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1347.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.00743494424 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66996808301 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.591078066914 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7935415364 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.2352941176 106.682146367 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8235294118 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.35294117647 7.06120827912 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166406596618 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601893474541 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490216483367 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107189377278 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0331122702517 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 50.2224549098 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.48 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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