some people say that what children watch on TV influences their behavior while others say the amount of time they spend watching TV influences their behavior. Discuss both views and give your opinion

There is much controversy surrounding effects of watching TV on children’s behavioral pattern. While it is often said that TV programs have discernible impacts on the ways children behave, a measure of time children channel into TV is also argued to be instrumental in shaping children’s manners. This essay will discuss both arguments and give a concluding viewpoint.

On the one hand, numerous social members tend to back the conviction that several behavioral ways of children can be shaped under the impact of television broadcasts. It would seem undeniable that children have an instinct for learning from and imitating the patterns of those who they may observe. In fact, in various parts of the world, the exposure to televised violent scenes in the films may trigger aggressive behaviors in children. Besides, no sooner do children get access to educationally oriented programs on the screen such as “Helping people to help themselves” than most of them are likely to be encouraged to behave in friendlier and thoughtful ways towards others.

Notwithstanding, the amount of time spent on TV programming also has deciding effects on children’s behavioral pattern. First, when diverting a sheer quantity of time into sitting on the screen so as to watch TV, various children, in all likelihood, are confronted with a sedentary lifestyle because they seemingly sit down on the TV screen and rarely take part in physical activities. Second, the long exposure to TV shows could deprive them of hours for participating in creative activities and socializing with other peers in reality. Therefore, this may be the main culprit of children’s poor social behaviors.

Overall, it is sensible for me to conclude that children’s behavioral pattern is strongly impacted by both TV programs and the time they allocate for watching TV.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 200, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...tity of time into sitting on the screen so as to watch TV, various children, in all like...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, may, second, so, therefore, while, as to, in fact, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37414965986 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24054529159 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602040816327 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7790117493 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.666666667 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262538409287 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108251198537 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726767148115 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193168434357 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657873993863 0.056905535591 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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