Some people think that to be successful you need to get in university education whereas others say it is not true Discuss both ideas and give your own opinion

In this day and age, there are many who claim that university's certificates are things that every learners need to acheive if they want to be successful. However, there are still some disagreements and refusals to this opinion. As far as I am concerened, two sides of argument have both merits and demerits, so, this essay will submit all terms and elaborate my own viewpoint.

On one hand of the argument, it is proved to a belief that nothing is more important than being educated under university's programme. Peeople speculate this might be due to the fact that until now, diplomas and degrees are still the most neccessary requirements for well-known companies. Moreover, many organizations offer employees to complete at least three-year of univeristy before applying or booking a seat. For instance, UNESCO and UNILEVER always check the applicant's diploma as a first target basically because they want to get high-educated workers to improve theri whole organizations. In addition, joining and working in a large company is the easies and quickest way to gain such valuable experiences annd become successful in the early age.

However, in the other hand, a minority of citizens believe that everyone will succeed if they thrive to be a best version of themselves and passionate on what they are doing. It is true for some cases because we are now living in a modern life, so certificates are less common in our daily basis, but experiences and fast brain are more crucial. For example, Microsoft owner ( Bill Gates ), who did not complete his education in Harvard University but he was successful since he was over 40s. Not only Bill Gates but also more than 100 people outther succeeded without participate in any university education. Furthermore, this world is now equal and it is recorded that more and more companies are opening to welcome undergraduated. Thus, it is no obsucre evidence that not only educated people become successful.

To conclude, although moving to unversity is good but it also depends on family's condition and individual's passion on learning. My perspective goes with the latter to support population to thrive to become victorious with their own life.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, still, thus, well, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1833.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 360.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09166666667 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8910459047 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 506.74238477 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1578529367 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.5625 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5625 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172039534688 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481157620481 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0314628586926 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878331012495 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409186942203 0.056905535591 72% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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