In this day and age, the university learners spend their majority of time to gaining knowledge instead of participating in outdoors activities to get experiences. As far as I am concerned, I completely agree with this opinion and this essay will examine my own viewpoint.
To begin, I think that young adults should balance between the study and play due to many reasons. First of all, learning at school plays an crucial part in every students’life because there will be more opportunities in the future if they get high qualifications. However, their life will not be valuable if they do not take part in entertainment and trips. To be more specific, if they only focus on learning, when they grow up and have less time with their friends, they will definitely regret their youth moments. Secondly, studying without playing will affect an adverse impact on both mental and physical health of students. This means some people will be in the mood of depression and they start to fear when communicating with other people. As a result, this issue brings drawbacks to students in both health and memories.
Furthermore, studying must take a long time period of gaining new knowledge and practicing into real-life situation. Hence, if students just study without use that knowledge, it will be lack of experiences and all things that they learnt will be useless. To illustrate, RMIT University usually organize for their freshman to join in some real activities or provide them some days off. The principles of this univeristy aim that after taking part in the real life, their students can understand the lessons deeper and get more experiences in their life and this also the reason to explain why the RMIT students always attract well-known companies when they graduated. Finally, it is necessary for students not only in the university but also in every level of education to reduce the study time and increase the play time.
To summarize, my perspective goes with the opinion that learners should play more than they did before because of enlisted reasons above. I strongly believe that students will gain healthier and happier life if they can balance their work and play moments.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... First of all, learning at school plays an crucial part in every students’life bec...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00547945205 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71873327165 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545205479452 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.916589363 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.1875 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8125 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210666207833 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732318538418 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453918488161 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125566633061 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365707087576 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 139, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... First of all, learning at school plays an crucial part in every students’life bec...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, i think, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1827.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00547945205 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71873327165 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545205479452 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.916589363 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.1875 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8125 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 7.06120827912 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210666207833 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0732318538418 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453918488161 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125566633061 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0365707087576 0.056905535591 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.