Some people think that children should aim to do their best at whatever they are doing. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is a popular sentiment that children should always be encouraged and put all of their efforts in order to achieve the top in whatever they are doing.However,this point of view provokes controversy while there are lots of opinions against this argument.They emphasize that children should spend more time playing and fully enjoy their childhood as well as their teenage before becoming an adult.In my opinion, while children aiming to be the best sounds great, they are not always required to be the excellent ones, in fact, it sometimes can be detrimental to them.
On the one hand, it can be denied that childhood is a crucial phase in each individual's life as it can shape their personality traits when they get older. Lots of recent studies have indicated that children who grow up in a non-competitive environment tend to develop a sense of sharing and caring in the future.And those who have always aimed for the top since their early ages seem to be more selfish and have no sense of community although they are the ambitious ones.Moreover, when children are free to play, to do what they want without thinking of competing with their friends helps them a lot to improve their creativity.For example, they can draw and write about whatever they love,there are no limitations and hesitations as they can fully enjoy these activities without the need to be the best.In the contrary, children who attend a lot of contests to achieve the titles have their creativity limited because they have to focus on certain topics in lieu of freely creating.
Additionally, the goal of becoming the top tier can be a burden to children,they can be obsessed with this aim,which will definitely prevent children from developing themself in the future.In term of parents, who always want their children to be the best, often have exorbitant expectations of their children.They often incentivize their children but children do not regard it as an encouragement but a burden. There are also some parents that try to segregate their children from their friends so that they can completely concentrate on their goals. However,it makes no sense since children might feel lonely and loneliness leads to some critical mental health problems such as depression and stress.
In conclusion, reaching the top is not always the best idea for children to follow and waste their childhood for their parents' desire, they should better enjoy their youth without competing with others so that they can develop their abilities in the way they want to without any limitations.
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- Some people think that children should aim to do their best at whatever they are doing Others disagree Discuss both views and give your own opinion 56
- Some people think that children should aim to do their best at whatever they are doing Others disagree Discuss both views and give your own opinion 56
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 24.0651302605 229% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 41.998997996 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 424.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03301886792 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83425415551 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 176.041082164 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.561755894193 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 649.8 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 60.0 20.2975951904 296% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 240.374537685 49.4020404114 487% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 304.857142857 106.682146367 286% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 60.5714285714 20.7667163134 292% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.4285714286 7.06120827912 247% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.01903807615 299% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279495808072 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.143548397973 0.084324248473 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627566144563 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194177461339 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214938638323 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 32.5 13.0946893788 248% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 19.04 50.2224549098 38% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.44779559118 196% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 11.3001002004 226% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 9.78957915832 291% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.0 10.1190380762 257% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.7795591182 241% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.