Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions.
Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.
It is consirdered that cultural traditions may be demolished when people are taking advantage of it as money-making attractions which is aimed at tourists while others think that it is the only solution to save these traditions.
First of all, money made from cultural traditions can be investigated in the preservation. Such as, monks from Ba Da temple take donated money to maintain the temple. Secondly, museums and gallaries which display cultural tradittions, should sell entry ticket to preserv the tradition. For example, Nguyen Phuong who is passionate about ao dai opened a ao dai gallery in Hanoi for everyone sharing the same passion with her.
But nowadays, many cultural traditions are changed to commercial so they lose their value. For example, lion dance is usually performed in special occasions by high level artists but it has became more often. Also, many tradittions are ruined by irresponsible tourists.
In conclusion, using cultural traditions for money-making has both advantages and disadvantages.
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- Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money making attractions aimed at tourists Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions Discuss on both sides and give your opinion 56
- Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 17.0 41.998997996 40% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 873.0 1615.20841683 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 160.0 315.596192385 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45625 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.55655882008 4.20363070211 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02463195075 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.725 0.561755894193 129% => OK
syllable_count: 270.9 506.74238477 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4090774433 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 106.682146367 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7777777778 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2222222222 7.06120827912 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.315634097067 0.244688304435 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.117941163311 0.084324248473 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151522940151 0.0667982634062 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21960307521 0.151304729494 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165073759891 0.056905535591 290% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.09 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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