Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others, however, believe that is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the period when many cultural traditions are commercialised, while many people think that our traditional heritages will be spoiled if they are used to make money, I would argue that commercialisation is also an integral part in preserving such traditions.
On the one hand, it is clear that travelling abroad is becoming more affordable and easier, as an obvious result, this trend causes many negative impacts on indigenous traditions. Firstly, meaning of literary and artistic heritages gradually are changes by revenue instead of traditional value. For example,
On the other hand, I believe that although globalisation impacts negatively on traditions, it also contributes a significant part in maintaining native traditional heritages. It is undoubted that people can not know a particular ethnic community if their valuable traditions or particular handicrafts can not propagated to the remaining part of the world, in which commercialisation plays an important role through literature festivals or concert venue where traditional values are professional performed. In a practical perspective, in many places, indigenous residents have to maintain their special conventionalities to ensure fundamental living conditions. In other words, priceless tradition can not survive unless native families have no stable financial base.
In conclusion, while there is a point of view that economic purpose is undermining cultural traditions due to aim at tourists instead of preserving them, I believe that commercialisation helps cultural values to spread out easier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to making'.
Suggestion: used to making
...l heritages will be spoiled if they are used to make money, I would argue that commercialisa...
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Line 3, column 308, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...stead of traditional value. For example, On the other hand, I believe that althou...
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Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'propagate'
Suggestion: propagate
...tions or particular handicrafts can not propagated to the remaining part of the world, in ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ilies have no stable financial base. In conclusion, while there is a point of v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, while, for example, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 232.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.80172413793 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.42877026312 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637931034483 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.859786727 49.4020404114 143% => OK
Chars per sentence: 168.25 106.682146367 158% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.875 7.06120827912 182% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171251880126 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0669030716446 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694119612195 0.0667982634062 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112238675295 0.151304729494 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0723472386502 0.056905535591 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.4 13.0946893788 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 50.2224549098 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.95 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.11 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 78.4519038076 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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