Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. others, however, believe that is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your opinion
When it comes to maintaining, people are divided on whether tourism is a good answer for that or the culprit of gradual cultural losses. Personally, I believe that tourism would only increase the likelihood of traditions disappearance due to its lucrativeness.
It is understandable why some people suggest the ideas of using tourism to preserve traditional customs. They usually say that local authorities must depend on certain financial sources to support any social campaigns or events targeting maintaining their traditions. However, this would make the native people who work in local tourist industry using the traditions to excite foreign visitors in various ways to maximize profits rather than as a part of their life. As a result, the traditions in the long term would lose their fundamental functions which they have had for a long time.
The worry about losing culture because of tourism is much more worth considered. Apart from the reason of the unconscious alteration of traditions for tourist purposes, local culture might as well be under pressure of foreign influences. Travellers from different parts of the world often bring their customs and behaviours to any places they visit, some could be highly exciting and attractive to local inhabitants compared to native ones. For example, in many mountainous areas in Vietnam, traditional songs were very popular among people in previous generations, but their contemporary descendants, because of the openness to tourists from outside areas, only listen to electronic music from more developed regions.
In conclusion, although it might be theoretically true that money from tourism could help save many traditions, I would argue that it is not the suitable strategy to prevent local culture from dying out. We should only maintain the customs if they are still meaningful to people’s lives, and not let them be impacted by any outsiders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, well, apart from, for example, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35761589404 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90094951555 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615894039735 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.9807656735 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.833333333 106.682146367 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1666666667 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195735883292 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0720356425539 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293769161642 0.0667982634062 44% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117858240866 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0231268791053 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.79 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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