some people think that getting a degree from university is the best way to guarantee a job, others believe that it would be better is they go straight to work and gain experience instead. discuss both sides and give your opinion
It is a widely held view that graduating from university is an effective guarantee for getting a job afterward; however, another point of view states that people will be better off gaining experience by actually taking part in the job market. From my viewpoint, I would support the idea of combining these two kinds of experience, as will be discussed later.
First of all, workers do not necessarily have a brighter career path with their university’s graduation certificate, as it does not prove how skilled they are. In fact, there are many students who are immensely lazy and just try to get barely enough qualifications to be able to graduate. An obvious example of this is Dung - a friend of mine - who was not attentive in class and who is now struggling a lot with his job opportunities.
An opposite view, which supports having a job immediately after school, is also not sound due to the lack of specialized knowledge of young workers. Take an extreme case of child labour for instance. If a teenager who is underqualified is asked to get a job, it is obvious that they will end up being a trivial house cleaner, a store worker, or such a low-level employee. At the same time, if that child is well-nurtured and is provided with sufficient education, there are possibilities that they may become an attorney, a doctor, or even a president, with thousands of job opportunities.
On the whole, neither the idea of possessing a university degree nor going straight to work is convincing, as they both have some defects. Hence, there is an alternative: students can go for a part-time job whilst studying their major. This will, at the same time, help in gaining their knowledge as well as their experience. With these fully developed understandings and skills, everyone can broaden their career path.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, hence, however, if, may, so, well, for instance, in fact, as well as, first of all, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88673139159 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99506940692 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.614886731392 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6890975988 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.153846154 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215878464992 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694577494593 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.072569308026 0.0667982634062 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129107791494 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685378848666 0.056905535591 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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