In a contemporary society, it is claimed that to be healthy is very vital to every individuals health, therefore private healthcare services should not be managed by business related enterprises. Although there are certain advantages,I would agree that they are outweighed by the drawbacks.
On the one hand, the advantages of private clinics are hard to ignore.The first benefit is all private hospitals have advanced medical equipment and modern infrastructure, compared with the traditional hospital which is run by government agencies. To explain how this happens, private hospitals are managed by large companies with strong financial strength so it is not difficult for them to purchase the best machines for their services. Another advantage of profit-yielding healthcare services is the service is always quick and easy for the customer. For example, generally in the public hospital a sick person needs to wait in line for many hours and complete complex procedures before meeting a doctor. The patient overload always makes the doctor not have enough time to take care and understand their patient.According to a recent survey, 55% of people in the city prefer to use the services of private hospitals and this rate continues to increase.
On the other hand, despite the aforementioned advantageous aspects, there are still some negative points about private clinics. Apparently, this type of hospital has detrimental impacts on cost for hospital expenses compared to public hospital. Wealthy people are potential customers of excellent service hospitals because only this class of people can afford this level of care. In the long term, this could cause a loss of balance in social community and the difference between the rich and the poor will increase. In addition private hospitals pose huge threats on management of government, on qualification of doctors and the growing system of private hospital. For instance, there are many private business establishments without a license which is harmful to life and health of patient.
In conclusion, taking everything into consideration, this reinforces my perspective that private hospitals have more influential benefits although it also bring some disadvantages.
- The first chart below shows the percentages of school aged girls and boy who were at secondary school in four regions of the world in 2000 The second chart shows the percentages of college aged men and women in higher education in the same year 72
- Some people think that good health is very important to every person so medical services should not be run by profit making companies Do the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantage 92
- Some people think that good health is very important to every person, so medical services should not be run by profit-making companies.Do the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantage? 84
In a contemporary society, it
In a contemporary society, it is claimed that to be healthy is very vital to every individuals health, therefore private healthcare services should not be managed by business related enterprises. Although there are certain advantages,I would agree that they are outweighed by the drawbacks.
On the one hand, the advantages of private clinics are hard to ignore.The first benefit is all private hospitals have advanced medical equipment and modern infrastructure, compared with the traditional hospital which is run by government agencies. To explain how this happens, private hospitals are managed by big boss or international company with strong financial strength so not difficult to them had best machines for their service. Another advantage of profit-yielding healthcare services is service always quick and easy for the customer. For example,generally puslish hospital sick person need to form in line to waiting hours and complete compex provide before meet doctor. The patient always overload make doctor don’t have time to take care and understand their patient.According a recent survey, 55% people in the city prefer to use service of private hospital and this rate continues to increase.
On the other hand, despite the aforementioned advantages aspects, there are still some note-worthy of private clinics. Apparently, this type hospital has detrimental impacts on cost hospital expenses than publish one. Wealthy person is potential customers of excellent service hospital because only this classes had solvency. In the long term, this cause of lose balance in social and distinguish the rich and the poor increasing.In addition private hopital pose huge threats on management of government on qualification of doctor and the growing system of private hospital. For instance, the are many private business establishment without a license which harmful to life and health of patient.
In conclusion, taking everything into consideration, this reinforces my perspective that private hospital has more benefit influences although it also bring some disadvantages.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
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Suggestion: , I
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Suggestion: The
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Suggestion: addition,
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Message: Did you mean 'brings'?
Suggestion: brings
...e influential benefits although it also bring some disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, if, so, still, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1893.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.51895043732 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05135156491 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588921282799 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 604.8 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.76152304609 210% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1785023754 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.214285714 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7667163134 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.78571428571 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223936324361 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0726354842415 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582095449231 0.0667982634062 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132652683439 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622173127609 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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