Some people think the government is responsible for rise in childhood obesity, while other think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
"Human desires has led to his own destruction", nowadays humans are suffering adversely from several diseases only because of their lifestyle. This topic reveals the issue, children are becoming more abest these days; are parents or government responsible for this? I will illustrate both the points of view with examples and give my opinion by the end.
On one side, some people blames government for dramatic increase in childhood obesity. They believe, government do not take prompt action to promote healthy lifestyle. Moreover, the burdened syllabus does not allow students to participate in extra curriculum activities, hence it results into obesity. Take, for example, in India government advertises junk food to raise the economy level of the country instead of limiting the production of packed products.
On the other hand, some antagonists believe that parents are rotting the health of their children, first of all, because parents encourage their children to eat junk food. Since, nowadays both the parents do not cook food at home, therefore, they rely more on quick meals to save time. A recent survey was conducted in India by "The Tribune" which stated that around 85% of Indian children suffer obesity only because of the hectic schedule of their parents.
Summing up all the points mentioned above, I partially agree with what the topic reveals. Since, I believe, both government and parents are responsible for the lathargic attitude and obesity of children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1272.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 236.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38983050847 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75779431327 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.648305084746 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 401.4 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.8455437736 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 7.06120827912 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183913002963 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714517220795 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.080927092002 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10641920862 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452918731317 0.056905535591 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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