Some people think that the government is responsible for the rise of obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
According to some people, the states' authority has a key role in increasing the overweight issues in young adolescents, however, others think that the main cause of this is bad parenting skills. In my opinion, I agree with the latter statement, because parents should motivate children to a healthy lifestyle.
On the one hand, people argue that the administration allowed low-cost food in the society, due to this many young children consume that meal and become obese. Plethora restaurants offer high calories meals at very fewer prices to entice school students. For example, the Indian regime imposes a high tax amount on local food street businesses, after this cost of food rise and people avoid that meal. If the same rule government implements to all food courts, therefore numerous young people cannot afford it. So, the national authority is responsible for obesity in children.
On the other hand, the main reason is that gaining weight in small children owing to bad habits of parents and I agree with this. Firstly, guardians always opt for a ready meal from the supermarket. In that food immense amounts of calories present and develop an obesity problem. Another reason is that the inactive lifestyle of the father and mother also affects the bodyweight of kids. For instance, a report from Stanford depicts 90% of children are the threat of obesity issue, whose parents are not involved in physical exercise. Thus, the unhealthy lifestyle of parents majors role in creates obesity in children.
In Conclusion, Although the food authority can eliminate the overweight by imposing a high tax on food, I think parents are more responsible for childhood obesity because of their inactive lifestyle and frequently consume ready meals.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'states'' or 'state's'?
Suggestion: states'; state's
According to some people, the states authority has a key role in increasing ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17957746479 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63217120133 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.577464788732 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.900731033 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.071428571 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2857142857 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.92857142857 7.06120827912 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25614811426 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0838110847713 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553918271206 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149803356156 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0156549252537 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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