Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere To what extent do you agree with this view

It is undeniable that art give meaning to our lives and helps us to understand our world. However, It is believed by few people that government budget should not be wasted on arts rather than allocating it for the betterment of the people. In my opinion, I completely agree with this opinion and believe government should de fund the arts until basic human needs are not ensured thoroughly.

To begin, there are several strong points to support the idea of allocating more funds in sector like education, health and employment. Firstly, education is the backbone of a country. If any governments failed to ensure education for all of its people , essentially, it will be a massive barrier for the growth. For example, in developing countries, government schools are the primary sources for locals to get to see the light of education those who live in remote areas.

Secondly, not every one in a country have the privilege to get proper treatment when it needs. To ensure this basis need for all, government must need to allocate more budgets in this sector compare to others. For instance, lots of people in Bangladesh rely on government hospitals due to its cost effectiveness compare to private hospitals.

Thirdly, A higher unemployment rate is considered as a curse to its economic growth. Needless to say, to improve the lifestyle of a nation, government need to make it certain that everyone has the opportunity to get a job. Failing to do so, cause a huge risk for brain drain and increasing in crime rates. This ultimately make the country more weaker. Such as, every years lots of people migrated from developing countries to developed countries due to better job opportunities and better life styles.

To conclude, while basic needs are still in demand, developing in arts will not be beneficial for a lion share of its people. Therefore, government need to make sure that the basic needs are properly ensured prior to thinking about funding arts.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, third, thirdly, while, for example, for instance, such as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1639.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95166163142 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75881746647 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570996978852 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.9270538464 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4117647059 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4705882353 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179700464359 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0555636202117 0.084324248473 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0515844488764 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103547707271 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536362708394 0.056905535591 94% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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