Some people think Governments should take measures regarding the healthy lifestyle of individuals. Others think it must be managed by individuals. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Health issues continue to be a controversial topic in every country, in this case either it should be managed by public or private. There are adequate reasons on both sides, and now I will consider each of those.

On the one hand, some people feel that one individual’s own willingness is not enough to maintain healthy lifecycle. For instance, there are numerous adults who have an addiction to, say, “preferred food without actual need,” such as liquor, coffee, and etc. Use of any of those on a regular basis will probably lead to — actually, will certainly cause — negative consequences. Consumers are aware of harmful contaminants of indulgence foods; however, despite the fact that toxic chemicals will shorten their life expectancy considerably, they experience difficulties with giving up. From that, it can be reasonably inferred that without external forces, for an ordinary person, it is hard to maintain a healthy lifestyle. Meanwhile, there are some harmful effects, which were came from sedentary habits, but it is apparent that this affects significantly less than that of the foods.

On the other hand, if a person already has a well-planned lifestyle, they would not need support from the state. Even though a citizen will have badly-designed daily plans, a government has nothing to do with that. In other words, a nation is responsible for providing healthcare facilities, but it is up to individuals to use those or not. For example, several developed countries effectively compensated one form of the inadequate manner’s effects — caused from sedentary lifestyle — by providing public gym: decreased frequency of cardiovascular diseases. However, every conscious person has to take responsibility for himself as his own, not relying on others. If people do not use those facilities, it would not have any impacts.

Overall, it is evident that some parts are the responsibilities of government, such as controlling cigarettes, liquors, and etc. However, individuals are also in control of their own health status; as long as we are human, we do know what is a righteous decision. All happenings caused by do not following the basis is nothing to blame others.

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Average: 3.6 (3 votes)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, so, well, while, as to, for example, for instance, such as, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 354.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.27401129944 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14277312037 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593220338983 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.9127942127 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.823529412 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8235294118 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47058823529 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0980392906962 0.244688304435 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0297295481053 0.084324248473 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0266099641293 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0599249893791 0.151304729494 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315684060397 0.056905535591 55% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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