Some people think that the main factors influencing a child’s development these days are things such as tv, friends and music. Others believe that family still remains very important.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt in the fact that the most important role in shaping a child's future is that of the parents. However, there are a few individuals who believe that there are many other social factors outside the family that influence the progress of the child. Both the views will be discussed in detail before I give my opinion.

To begin with, the foremost reason that the supporters of former view give is that students today are able to access a lot of information from the online videos and blogs of experts from different fields. Nonetheless, they can also watch violent movies and play video games which waste their time and also corrupt their naive minds. With the increase in the number of social networking sites, it is easy to make friends with anyone without knowing about their background. The company that a child has also determine the traits of his character as peer pressure also influences the actions of a child.

On the other hand, the argument put forward by believers of the second opinion is that a child spends most of its time with its family. The parents know about the strengths and weaknesses of their wards and are most suitable for making the best decisions for them. A child also derives its moral education at its home on the initial basis. The child who is able to communicate with his parents and siblings efficiently is able to make friends easily and also gains confidence. Hence, a positive and friendly environment within a family is indispensable to raise a child healthily.

Thus, in order to draw a conclusion, I would like to assert that both family and social surroundings of a child play a crucial part in the growth and development of a child. They also help to determine the behavior of a child when it reaches adulthood. Therefore, parents and teachers should work together and take care that the child's future is not disturbed by any of the social factors surrounding him.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'determined'.
Suggestion: determined
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, therefore, thus, no doubt, to begin with, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 336.0 315.596192385 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74404761905 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53746725681 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53869047619 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.6442920473 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.266666667 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.33333333333 7.06120827912 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185767728548 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665396375084 0.084324248473 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055662580067 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126386861976 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0639916615767 0.056905535591 112% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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