Some people think that in the modern world we have become more dependent on each other, while others think that people are now more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is debated that today our life is more dependent on the people around us. However, I believe that this developed era makes humans become more independent compared to the past.
There are several reasons why people become reliant on the modern world. Firstly, life is more difficult and expensive, and we are less self-sufficient. When life expenses are increasing considerably, we fall into imbalance and need others’ support. For example, the unemployed and the underprivileged cannot afford their daily necessities when all items’ costs are extravagant, they must rely on other people such as relatives, friends, and state subsidization. Children need their parents’ money and love to survive and school. Secondly, our jobs are much more specialized, and we need to work in teams. The more economic development, the tasks are more complicated that an individual cannot handle. We have to allocate work to many people to make the job accomplished. Hence, we are dependent on other people at work and in life.
Despite the above argument, I believe that we are more self-reliant and may be dependent on other things rather than other people. Firstly, with technological outbreaks, there is a number of advanced machines devised which can carry out a lot of crucial tasks with high accuracy. Human participation is unnecessary in many circumstances, we just depend on devices and equipment. In addition, families are more dispersed, therefore providing less support to members. Moreover, children are well educated enough to be more independent. They like to lead a free lifestyle and become more assertive rather than put their life in others’ hands. So, I think that we have more chances to self-support and live on our terms in this modern society.
In conclusion, it is inevitable that people living on this planet have a bond with each other in all aspects of life, but the social-economic burgeoning helps us become more independent from others.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...hat today our life is more dependent on the people around us. However, I believe that this developed...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22397476341 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02187126759 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567823343849 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7384017761 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1578947368 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6842105263 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379768979756 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116006315334 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661351523674 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233540505361 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295660219786 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 56, Rule ID: NOUN_AROUND_IT[1]
Message: Consider using 'the surrounding people'?
Suggestion: the surrounding people
...hat today our life is more dependent on the people around us. However, I believe that this developed...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1656.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22397476341 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02187126759 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567823343849 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.7384017761 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.1578947368 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6842105263 20.7667163134 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379768979756 0.244688304435 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116006315334 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661351523674 0.0667982634062 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233540505361 0.151304729494 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295660219786 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.7 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.