Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate
These days, there are a controversial statement which some of the society believed that museum should be enjoyable destinations to entertain people, while other think that the purpose of museums is to educate the visitors. Looking at those arguments, both of them possess advantages in a different point of view. In this essay, I absolutely agree that museum is such an educational places to visit beside of recreation facilities which means it gives more merits in education sides rather than the drawbacks.
In the one hand, the main benefit of museum as educational destinations initially is the visitors especially the children can relate the history visually at the moment. It is because the museum preserves the footage and heritages and also provides the histories behind them which are expanding the knowledge of the visitors. Secondly, those inheritance can improve their historical awareness. It is due to evocativeness, the heritages bring people to the past and realize that history is important and unforgettable. For example, footage in a war museum such as pictures of the war location and swords which contained each story of them make people relate the war situation, cherish the patriots sacrifices, and richened their knowledge obviously. From that, those evokes strong emotions and increase people historical awareness. So it is important to have a point of view that museum is outweigh to be seen as educational places.
On the other hand, the point of view that museum is preferred to be an enjoyable destination also possess its advantages. One of them is because museum conserves several old treasures such as ancient heritages which are good to be captured. It is due to uniqueness, whose kind of sight seeing and bring up a desire to take pictures with those stuffs. For instance, old car museum preserves a lot of old cars which are limited and unique and causing people don’t want to miss their chance to capture their self at the moment. Therefore, we obtained a side of the museum which support it to be a joyful place. So there is no doubt that considering museum as educational destination is more supported rather than as recreation places due to its main purpose.
In conclusion, from right here I stand that museum supposed to be an educational and historical places after compared several aspects. In my opinion, it gives more educational advantages rather than the entertain benefit.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 7.30460921844 233% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 41.998997996 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1615.20841683 126% => OK
No of words: 398.0 315.596192385 126% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11809045226 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86721290202 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.477386934673 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 658.8 506.74238477 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8516225198 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.166666667 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.77777777778 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.410845320905 0.244688304435 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121688460699 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.138745285547 0.0667982634062 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262361676135 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11843845088 0.056905535591 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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