Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain young people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.,
Whether museums should entertain their young visitors, or should they focus on impart their audience with knowledge is a topic of the public interest. This essay will elaborate on both merits and drawbacks of the ideas and explain why I believe that the combination of both would optimize the utilization of museums.
On the one hand, investment in enhancement of entertaining experience for attraction of young individuals would not only facilitate income generation but help museums achieve their social responsibility. First, young visitors are tend to outnumber other age groups in terms of purchasing power, which stems from the fact that they are less price sensitive. This means that if museums can lure more young vistitors, they are able to receive more money from admission fee and sales of souvernirs to these people. The financial resources then would be ploughed back to buy artefacts, renovate premises, or organize events for the museums. In addition, given more young spectators visit museums, the role of spreading out historical and cultural knowledge of museums would be fullfilled.
On the other hand, provision of historical and cultural values to spectators is the nature of musems, they therefore, should focus on the basic function. By satisfying the need of entertainment for young individuals, museums would deviate from their nature that is to provide people with cultural, aesthetic, and historical values. More importantly, from economic perspective, museums are not designed for recreational activities. Therefore, to held entertainment activities museums have to invest enormously in relevant expenditures including construction of new areas, purchase of relevant equipment, and salary for staff. If the expenses are not managed well, the museums would place themselves at risk of loss, or even bankcruptcy.
In sum, I am of the viewpoint that museums should combine educational and entertaining instrument to optimize their resources. Given the combination of the two appoaches, museums would be able to earn more profit, complete their position as knowledge providers; meanwhile, they should allocate money and manpower for education purpose as well as control their expenses properly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...sponsibility. First, young visitors are tend to outnumber other age groups in terms ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, in addition, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1899.0 1615.20841683 118% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.6017699115 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99078677978 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560471976401 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 582.3 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4121048098 49.4020404114 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.642857143 106.682146367 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.57142857143 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249895840883 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.089041723039 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0399237844213 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158789694899 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0161136158196 0.056905535591 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.5 12.4159519038 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 78.4519038076 141% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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