Some people think that not all criminals should be kept in prison. Some criminals should do unpaid work to help other people in the community. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?
It is argued that not all offenders should be locked up, instead they should render free service to the community. I agree with this school of thought because criminals do not commit the same degree of crimes and helping the society will benefit them.
The judgement whether to keep a criminal in prison should be based on the degree of seriousness of the crime committed. This is to say that offenders who violated the law by committing major crimes should be kept behind bars as punishment, while those who did non-serious violations should serve the community. This method could reduce crime rates because violent criminals can not influence and persuade minor offenders to reoffend. For example, in the Philippines, misdemeanor, such as theft and vandalism, which are usually carried out by those who are below18 years of age are punished to do social services in their community.
Community service is a good way to penalize perpetrators who did minor violations because this will help them realize their self-worth. Cleaning the streets, planting trees or working in charities are common services that allow them to work in a team. They will be given a certain task or responsibility to fulfill which is needed to achieve the goal of the group. Through this way, they will be able to see the importance of their contribution as a member of society and helps to motivate them to refrain from reoffending. As a result, there will be a reduction of crime rate and these individuals will become good and responsible citizens. For instance, in my home town most of the volunteers during out-of-reach programs had history of breaking the law and were asked to do unpaid community works.
In conclusion, crimes are not all punishable by prison and another method to penalize criminals is social service. In my opinion, sentencing perpetrators should be based on the extent of the harm done and providing free service to the community will have a positive impact on their lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 549, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... which are usually carried out by those who are below18 years of age are punished to do...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01807228916 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77196816707 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536144578313 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.7625748897 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.0 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7142857143 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227191386558 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0816312227945 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0564576380295 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160990038491 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0707870636032 0.056905535591 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 78.4519038076 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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