Some people think that the qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In the modern world, becoming a successful person requires real-life experience which is not easily acquired when learning at universities. From my viewpoint, although having practical experience about many aspects of life contributes to an individual’s success, I believe that being educated in tertiary education is also considered as an essential part in gaining success.
Without doubts, obtaining hands-on experience provides people with a large amount of job opportunities. It is easy to notice that the employers emphasize more in their applicants’ career summaries rather than their academic backgrounds, so meeting the companies’ needs could help the candidates more likely to be admitted for the positions. In addition, having practical expertise about a particular field also results in excellent performances at work and having good references when employees move to new workplaces.
However, having few academic qualifications could pose a dire threat to the job seekers and the employers too. It is undeniable that being not well educated in colleges makes contribution to a workforce having non-professional background. For instance, the laborers themselves cannot achieve work experiences when they do not have the theory knowledge about their disciplines. Furthermore, the large quantity of candidates without qualifications applying for jobs could make the employers find it more difficult to recruit favorable people for the positions, which could lead to the less well-prepared workforce in the future. Employees, especially people who involve in related-to-society careers, might make the progress to a wealthy and developed society delayed and even worse than before.
To recapitulate, I would like to highlight that while handing on operational experience is undeniable to be beneficial for job seekers, people should not neglect the importance of obtaining qualifications and having good academic backgrounds when applying for jobs. In the long run, the shortage of professional employees could become a social predicament that may harm next generations.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, well, while, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1781.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.8013029316 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.3310198623 2.80592935109 119% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602605863192 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 549.0 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.9363679909 49.4020404114 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.416666667 106.682146367 139% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5833333333 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132186969649 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0497143424694 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429219118398 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0843892738935 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338866850268 0.056905535591 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.7 13.0946893788 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 50.2224549098 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.66 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.02 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 78.4519038076 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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