Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvement

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Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvement.

On the one hand, there are those who believe that learners who have the highest scores should be rewarded. (As hard work to set outstanding students apart from mediocre students.) When/As they are rewarded, they will put much effort into their studies. Different from lazy students who have bad studying results, the straight-A student set their priority on learning over play and entertainment. Instead of watching TV, playing games, they spend time revising for exam exams. Thus, hard work will be translated into high scores. In contrast, mediocre learners often neglect studies. Such an attitude hold them back from scoring highly in exams.

On the other hand, I side with those argue that schools should honor students who make progress in learning. Firstly, appreciation will contribute to incentivize them to apply themselves. They will have motivation for striving for higher grades in the next exam. When students have trouble learning, high results as they expect will help them go through and focus on revising for exams. Secondly, a performance-based reward scheme will lead to obsession with rewards. Learners even cheat to attain a higher score and resort to any means available. In this case, it is ludicrous to reward which make the studying enviroment at schools become unfair.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 108, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... the highest scores should be rewarded. As hard work to set outstanding students a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, thus, apart from, in contrast, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1090.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 208.0 315.596192385 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24038461538 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60795040701 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.653846153846 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 314.1 506.74238477 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.8163028852 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.6666666667 106.682146367 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.8666666667 20.7667163134 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.38176352705 46% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173510566145 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0537364251173 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684313439424 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137065392411 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0148230806938 0.056905535591 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 50.2224549098 133% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.52 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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