Some people think that schools should reward students who show the best academic results, while others believe that it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is widely believed that students with excellent academic results should be rewarded by their schools. However, others claim that rewarding students who show great improvement is very essential. As far as I am concerned, I am in favor of the second opinion. And my reasons will be given out in this essay.
On the one hand, there are severals reasons why it should be important to reward the students with great improvements. First of all, all students are given equal chance to receive reward. Consequently, it is an encouragement for every students to make much more effort in studying. Secondly, It promotes learning in the right way, which help students study for enjoyment and understanding instead of gaining highest scores. Therefore, their study pressure can be reduced easily and any negative actions such as cheating may be disappear.
On the other hand, schools reward excellent students for some reasons. First, it motivates gifted children to study harder to get the highest score. Then, they may compete to each other to win the first prize at schools and the best students are identified. Especially, they can have a chance to improve their ablities to gain definite achievements. For instance, in my school, two gifted students in the top of my school have recently won the National prize in Physics and Literature.
Taking everything into consideration, people have to weigh up in their thoughts to what extent this issue should be supported. However, the discussions are convincing enough to lead me to the conclusion that it is better for schools to reward all the students who improve their performance day by day.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 400, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'gaining the highest'.
Suggestion: gaining the highest
... enjoyment and understanding instead of gaining highest scores. Therefore, their study pressure...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, such as, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1371.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 271.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05904059041 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05734859645 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79678507951 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.586715867159 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 415.8 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1400742843 49.4020404114 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.6875 106.682146367 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9375 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33537325666 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107704423488 0.084324248473 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0995721902146 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202783361725 0.151304729494 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625030800156 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 13.0946893788 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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