Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
It is true that the method which is used to help young individuals to become successful adults in the future is a debatable issue.
While it is argued that a sense of competition in children performs a crucial role in their lives, i believe that teamwork skills can provide enormous benefits to them.
On the one hand, it is argued that young people should be motivated to become more useful adults. Firstly, this move can enable children to promote their valuable potential personalities. For example, by participating several competitions, a considerable amount of students can stand a better chance of proving their abilities in mathermatics, physics or economics. Secondly, competitions not only help children to enhance their skills but also allow them to work independently. Being motivated by competitive sense, young people will try their best to cultivate great success by themselves, which encourages the ability of working independently. As a result, children could be more productive and valuable in the future.
On the other hand, i would agree with those who believe that teamwork skills can bring huge advantages to young people. As those skills always occupy a essential role in all situations, those children should be taught to co-operate to become more useful. For instance, as a company will have a distinctive culture, young individuals should follow that culture to integrate and obtain success. Furthermore, by working with their colleagues, young people could gain a better knowledge of them. As a result, teamwork skills can help young individuals to stand a better chance of cementing heathy relationships with their co-workers when they are awarded with decent jobs in the future.
In conclusion, although it is argued that a sense of competition play a vital role in children, i believe that those who are taught to co-operate will become more successfull people.
- The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities 78
- Public celebrations (national days, festivals) are held in many countries. Some people say that these celebrations are a waste of money and we should spend money on more important things. Do you agree or disagree? Give your reasons and examples according 59
- The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities 56
- Young people who commit crimes should be treated in the same as as adults who commit crimes To what extent do you agree or disagree 74
- Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that that should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...g people. As those skills always occupy a essential role in all situations, those...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...petition play a vital role in children, i believe that those who are taught to co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25742574257 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97393982709 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508250825083 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 497.7 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4081175071 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.785714286 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.9285714286 7.06120827912 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30246617691 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114829869349 0.084324248473 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0994005927563 0.0667982634062 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180326287216 0.151304729494 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907020291415 0.056905535591 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.