Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination Others think money and appearance are more important Discuss both views and give your opinion

Success is an issue that everyone concerns all the time. Although many people argue that money and appearance lead to success, I strongly claim that true success is thanks to hard work and determination.
Nowadays, those who are rich and good-looking to be also considered successful. These people either are born in affluent families and heir to a large fortune or inherit an admirable beauty. Receiving a high-quality education and getting a dream job can be taken for granted to these lucky individuals. However, there are a lot of definitions of success as well as uncountable ways to get it. It is pretty subjective to say that money and appearance primarily lead to success because numerous people have approached the peak of their careers without these mentioned-above fortunes. For instance, Pham Nhat Vuong, Vietnam’s first billionaire, started from scratches by purchasing instant noodles for the low-income groups. All Vietnamese people admire him due to his constant determination and contribution.
On the other hand, regardless of being wealthy or moneyless, gorgeous or unattractive, everyone needs to be striving and determined to get accomplished in whatever aspects of their life. Indeed, it is true that someone beautiful and affluent is a successful one, but their attempts also play a vital role in that achievement. Otherwise, all reputations and social standing are just titled but penniless. To specify, one uses his money to butter up with his boss to get promoted. His higher position, however, could not match with his competence. Thus, to succeed in a career, people need to figure out what they love and do it wholeheartedly by working hard, dealing with challenges, and being persistent, which are factors for human success.
In conclusion, there are thousands of ways to win life. Money and good-look are merely advantages, but decisive factors are striving and willpower.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, so, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28618421053 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05566255776 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.625 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.364498413 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5294117647 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8823529412 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.23529411765 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.67935871743 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.169309854739 0.244688304435 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.047951159548 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503391420357 0.0667982634062 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108662662199 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.04799694764 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 50.2224549098 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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