Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination while other think that tere are more important factors such as money and appearance Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination,while other think that tere are more important factors such as money and appearance.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A minority of indivuals in contemporary society belive that success in life comes from effort and determination, whereas others belive that severals factor namely money and appearance are equaly important. From my perspective, I strongly agree with the statements above and the following essay will support my point.
On the one hand, people in the 4.0 diustrial era tend to care more about the outside appearance rather than the inner spirit. For instance, a famous Vietnamese singer name Duc Phuc has had a plastic sugery in oder to gain a large amount of fans. Although, having a huge range of talent but a majority of the audiences have a positive view at him due to his appearance. Thus, it is hard for all indivisuals to archieve success without pay attention other facial factors.
On the other hand, having a good working personality help every person gain lots of knowledge and experiences. Neverthenless, owning a large amount of valueble things still bring a lot of benefits. In particular, teenagers born into affluent families have more conditions and amenities than underprivileged ones. As a result, finaces also a momentous factors that affect the success of inhabitants in the current society.
In conclusion, good looking appearance, satble condition still need to be sccompanied by determiation and hard working to make various achievements. Futhurmore, the social community should not judge and deny others efforts to touch the door of success just because they are not good looking.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 352, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'factor'?
Suggestion: factor
.... As a result, finaces also a momentous factors that affect the success of inhabitants ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, still, then, thus, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, in particular, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1264.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 243.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20164609053 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95883342774 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.687242798354 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.2388392762 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 105.333333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5833333333 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18126861867 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0541145227698 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0487599381651 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974498912536 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348597473759 0.056905535591 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.89 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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