Some people think that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?
It is true that some people believe that all teenagers should contribute to their community by doing unpaid work in their free time. While l agree that this would benefit both teenagers and the community. I do not consider that such unpaid work should be compulsory.
On the one hand, teenagers can certainly help themselves and their local community by doing unpaid work when they have some spare time. Firstly, teenagers themselves will benefit by broadening their own experiences, such as learning new skills or working as part of a team. Secondly, having some voluntary work experience is a very useful addition to the resume of a young person when they apply for a job or university place later in life. It indicates a willingness to work and to learn in a practical way. Finally, the community benefits through the unpaid work done, because those jobs may never have been undertaken if financial resources were lacking.
On the other hand, I disagree that teenagers should be forced to do unpaid work. One reason is that the pressure of studying for exams leaves little time for students to pursue other activities. After school, there is always homework and revision, which have to b done as a priority. Another important factor is that young people need some free time to enjoy themselves, to develop hobbies and interests to take up a sport or to make new friends. If one of the interests of teenagers is to do some voluntary work, then this should be encouraged for all the reasons which have been discussed, and this voluntary system is surely the best approach.
In conclusion, although I accept that working as volunteers can be beneficial for teenagers, I disagree with the idea that we should make this compulsory.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1446.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90169491525 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65325652378 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538983050847 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.408431065 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.285714286 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0714285714 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455856566975 0.244688304435 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16898369057 0.084324248473 200% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135162556827 0.0667982634062 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.296613697361 0.151304729494 196% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.176223360218 0.056905535591 310% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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