Some people think travelling abroad is a valuable experience for young people. Others think it wastes too much time and expense. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Having travelled to 15 countries by the time I was just 23 years of age, I am obviously a proponent of travelling young. In my opinion, the benefits of travelling at a young age hugely outweigh the potential disadvantages, although certain risks do exist.
Firstly, expenditure is always the greatest concern for young people since most of them haven’t worked a lot, they often lack the financial resources to travel abroad. Moreover, some people argue that young people should focus more on their study or work instead of wasting time on leisure such as travelling. Besides, the parents may worry about if their children will be safe to travel to an unfamiliar foreign place. While these disadvantages do exist, I believe that there are more merits for young people to explore the world.
There is no denying that travel can broaden people’s horizon. By meeting new people, getting to know different cultures and adventuring in different places, these experiences which young people can gain from travelling are absolutely valuable and beneficial to their future study or work life. Furthermore, whilst travelling as well as exploration, they can make their knowledge wider and be open-minded. Last but not least, young people especially who just graduated from high school can learn to live independently through travelling abroad since they need to make themselves to get to used to a completely different environment from home.
In a conclusion, even though some malpractices exist, I believe travelling abroad brings young people crucial and valuable sophisticate.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 138, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1408.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31320754717 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93646983785 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.622641509434 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 427.5 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.6778359399 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 106.682146367 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0833333333 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.41666666667 7.06120827912 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252606887594 0.244688304435 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972781306741 0.084324248473 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0453385812725 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158864840448 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0290151779178 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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