Some people think that young people should be required to do unpaid work helping people in the community. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
Education is one of the top priorities among nations around the world, particularly in the prosperous society nowadays. There are various methods to shape children’s moral behaviors as well as transfer knowledge. Yet it is argued that it should be mandatory for the young to take charge of doing unpaid work for the community. While this practice may cause several problems relating to wasting valuable time and the exploitation of the young, from my perspective, the overall impact is tremendously positive.
One of the major disadvantages of requiring youngsters to take part in unpaid jobs is that most of those jobs definitely take a huge amount of time to accomplish despite not having deserved salary for them. Certainly, when accepting to take responsibility for those work like volunteering at hospitals, they have to spend their precious time to set aside their spare time to make sense of regulations and procedures as well. In addition, they also have to cultivate several necessary skills to meet the requirements with the purpose of supporting the community. Furthermore, if this approach obligates people with hectic schedules, those people may lack time so that they can let their steam off and have their whale of a time with their beloved ones, which leads to some psychological disorders. Another problem is that although social activities will facilitate human life, many teenagers are becoming innocent victims as they are being labour exploited. In fact, numerous organizations try to hire and exploit those children due to their illegal benefits. For instance, Thanh Cong which is a Vietnamese food company used to ask young participants to engage in distributing flyers to raise public health awareness. Indeed, this is an indirect way to transfer the advertised message with the aim of promoting their sales.
In spite of several negative impacts mentioned above, the advantages of encouraging young people to help their fellow citizens are more significant. First and foremost, this method is one of the most effective ways to foster the fellow identity relationship and enhance their moral development. This is because when aiding other people, will create an opportunity to get to know in-depth disabled or the poor difficulties, leading to having well-rounded perspectives. Therefore, the young can acknowledge those struggles to overcome challenges, and potentially become more empathetic citizens. Moreover, this tendency is beneficial for future careers as these days, recruiters are destined for employing those who join in voluntary activities related to this vacancy. This is because employers are considered to have acquired experience as well as have a high commitment and dedication. Accordingly, those candidates will have more chances to receive better positions.
In conclusion, while there are some drawbacks to forcing young people to partake in charity work such as wasting their time, and being taken advantage of excessively exploited, I still believe this method does many wonders for them due to improving positive morality and increasing chances of employment. Therefore, both the government and educators should reduce the workload at schools so that they have enough time to engage in unpaid work to gain valuable experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, while, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 41.998997996 169% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2771.0 1615.20841683 172% => OK
No of words: 512.0 315.596192385 162% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.412109375 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.20363070211 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95424538002 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 294.0 176.041082164 167% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57421875 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 887.4 506.74238477 175% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.993109608 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.952380952 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.380952381 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61904761905 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 8.67935871743 196% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171671573673 0.244688304435 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451832775799 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0645671229532 0.0667982634062 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114224726177 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424860080087 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 160.0 78.4519038076 204% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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