Some people think that young people should spend free time with families instead of outside entertainment, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Whether the youth should devote their spare time to family-oriented pursuits or outside diversions has been a topic of controversy. I am convinced by both sides of this arguments as it is essential that youngsters allocate their idle time to both families and outside enjoyments.
On the one hand, proponents of the young dedicating their free time to family-based endeavors have their own convincing grounds. The primary reason for this is that family plays an indispensable role in nurturing people’s spiritual lives owing to it fostering sense of belonging and emotional attachment among family members. As a result, a strengthened family bond can render the young more confident, improving their outlook on life. However, the argument is flawed in that allocating time to family rather than social engagement can make the youth lack soft skills owing to limited exposure to the outside society. True as it may sound, parental guidance or family engagement can also equip people with those skills, which may come in useful when it comes to leading an independent life.
On the other hand, the reasons why it is vital that the young take part in external recreations seem obvious. To start with, those recreational activities, besides family, can help improve one's social skills like communication or problem-solving skills through encountering many new people and challenges outside family protection. This can grant the young an opportunity to improve their employability, thus assuring them a stable life with a proper job. Another essential point to consider is that devoting spare time to outside diversions can also expand the youth’s social circle, which can act as a catalyst to move up their career ladder. To exemplify, people can utilise those high-quality relationships from outside entertainment to seek potential promotion at work or learn valuable lessons from their friends.
In conclusion, I contend that it is beneficial for the young to distribute their free time between family interactions and recreational activities as they both foster young people’s mental health and career prospects.
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- Some people think that young people should spend free time with families instead of outside entertainment others disagree Discuss both views and give your opinion 84
- Some people think that young people should spend free time with families instead of outside entertainment others disagree Discuss both views and give your opinion 84
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, thus, in conclusion, as a result, to start with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40662650602 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99368347218 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584337349398 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 38.0185255372 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.076923077 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5384615385 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23076923077 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253446889999 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0956070109509 0.084324248473 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0409885847199 0.0667982634062 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173851787198 0.151304729494 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0187720367252 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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