Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others believe that zoos can be useful in protecting animals.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In this modern world, wildlife parks are believed to be extremely brutal and have to stop operating permanently, whereas there are some of those who are of the opinion that this is a effective way to save animals from going extinct. From my perspective, both viewpoints are justifiable; however, I prefer to gravitate towards the latter.
To begin with, it is comprehensible why some people subscribe to the former. First and foremost, proponents of zoos would argue that animals which are being captive would be undoubtedly interfered in their private lives by tourists, scientists because most species could be frightened by the appearance of a group of people and leading to their usual habit like eating. In addition to this, in some certain zoological gardens, the habitats used to be not spacious enough for these animals to live as well as being run-down. For this reason, this would lead to the creation of their boredom, and hence being suffered from some diseases. Thus, these may be the justifications for the opposition of the first group.
On the other hand, I am the advocate of the view that zoos can play a partial role in preventing animals from dying out. First of all, nowadays, governments have allocated a large sum for upgrading facilities, widening their living environments and adding more plants in order to create artificial habitats which bear a striking resemblance to the natural areas, and thereby bettering their life quality. Furthermore, each species has its own zones so that they can not be killed by predators; and moreover, when inhabiting these man-made areas, one would not only be protected from overpoaching but also have good conditions to produce offsprings that they can both maintain and expand their species population.
In conclusion, while many think that it is inhumane to keep animals in captivity, it seems to me that zoos are ideal destinations to save endangered animals and hidered them from being on the verge of extinction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, well, whereas, while, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09480122324 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81015628904 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590214067278 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 516.6 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.0081182317 49.4020404114 172% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.454545455 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7272727273 20.7667163134 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 16.7272727273 7.06120827912 237% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311607972523 0.244688304435 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111624246306 0.084324248473 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0631857425558 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170485625797 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0426811228906 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 13.0946893788 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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