Some say that because many people are living much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerately.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, there has been an ongoing argument that working period should be increased deliberately because longevity of mankind is being extended. From my perspective, I totally do not advocate for this idea.
There are a plethora of reasons why I disagree with that opinion. First, since some health problems relating to mental and physical hinder the elder citizens work effectively, their contribution to the enterprises is no longer valuable. In fact, by holding their position, it impacts negatively on both their health and development of companies. Second, by not inducing this idea, the government could avoid some severe damages or accidents from the older when they work. That means that it decreases the risky in the labor environment, which plays significant roles in economic developments.
Apart from the practical reasons I expressed above, I also believe that this idea does not bring any merits for society in terms of the economy and morality. The older have their right to retire early, which means they have more time to enjoy their life that they are deserved to obtain. It, thus, the government could show respects for ancestors, who dedicate their life for the developments of the country. Regarding the economy, in lieu of continuing hiring elderly people, the government should encourage all young people, who are unemployed, to occupy the vacant positions left by retired people. By the way, the unemployment rates will decrease and result in eradicating burdens for the economy.
In conclusion, with the compelling reasons relating to the health of the older, morality, and the economy, I completely disagree with this opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, thus, apart from, in conclusion, in fact, by the way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1399.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29924242424 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76339452275 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.621212121212 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3063885033 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.615384615 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3076923077 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46153846154 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124174022613 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0418046292221 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358326661388 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791953240262 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482903159681 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.19 8.58950901804 119% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 78.4519038076 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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