Some say that because many people live much longer, the age at which people retire from work should be raised considerably. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In contemporary society, that the longer retirement should be taken into consideration due to the longer life expectancy has generated a hotly debated. I partly agree with that statement for the following reasons.
The longer life expectancy is a consequence of a better welfare, medical condition,etc. Thus, working for some more years is expected by many people, however, simultaneously it raises various concerns in this day and age. Firstly, senior citizens may face to several heatlthy problems such as heart attack, dementia, … which may harm their productivity in terms of company’s benefits. Moreover, healthy problems such as these in elderly people are extremely dangerous and none of us expect that just because of working. In addition, a longer retirement generates job-hunting burdens on graduates. To clarify that, according to previous studies, a huge workforce who had finished their 4 years education could not find a job since the full of employee in firms.
However, retirement does not mean that older people are suppose to stay at home without any contributing to society. As a former skilled labour, their cumulative experiences are valuable and very helpful to young generation. It is undeniable that many experts in some areas such as profession teachers or doctors are old but they still play a key role with a huge impact in their fields. Besides, regarding in the countries which have to face with population aging, increasing limit of retirement might also considered as a solution to deal with allocated workforce.
In conclusion, in light of afore- mentioned factors, I am more convinced that increase the retirement age will do more harm than good. It is recommended that the negative influences of that tendency should be taken into serious consideration before be conducted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, still, thus, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1541.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.3321799308 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00458018121 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.650519031142 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.3015588389 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.071428571 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6428571429 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.07142857143 7.06120827912 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220318074243 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627239144536 0.084324248473 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428372255372 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119658451369 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0134890841133 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.55 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.