Some say that music, art and drama are as important as other school subjects, especially at the primary level.
Do you agree or disagree?
Art, Music, and drama are some talents that be improved in some ways. While some people believe that include those subjects for the school lessons is the best choice to improve their talent, while the others disagree with this statement. In this essay, I will totally agree with the statement since the students can improve their talent as they study in the school. Furthermore, they could have more an extra ability which can be useful for them.
On the one hand, giving some talent lessons such as music, drama, and art can improve the inner talent of the student which will not appear if the school does not offer those lessons. The student will be given chance to improve their talent as they study. As a result, the can do more than just science lessons, but also they can dig their deepened talent. For example, students who are given a talent study from their school will be able to have more chance to have more activity when they finish their high school.
On the other hand, the ability that can be gained from the talent subjects which are provided by the school will be beneficial for the students, in spite of having another talent to do, they also can have a job with those particular talent. For example, students, who have abilities in playing instrument and drama could use their talent to make a course which will teach people how to play and act as a musician and actor which can be taken from their experiences that they have gained from the talent lessons in the school.
In conclusion, some essential subjects which can improve our talent such as act, drama, and music are important to the students. Besides improving another inner talent from the students, moreover it can be useful for the students for their future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 396, Rule ID: MORE_A_JJ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'a more extra'?
Suggestion: a more extra
...he school. Furthermore, they could have more an extra ability which can be useful for them. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in spite of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1437.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68078175896 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.12842460561 2.80592935109 76% => OK
Unique words: 135.0 176.041082164 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439739413681 0.561755894193 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 439.2 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.0947649102 49.4020404114 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5833333333 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125551537621 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0727514106156 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0698869530597 0.0667982634062 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0980227287287 0.151304729494 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400882492527 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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