It is common nowadays that students work for a period of time instead of going straight to university. In my opinion, young people can gain new experience while I also think that it could lead to some problems.
On the on hand, one of the advantages of getting into a job before university is that you can learn new things which are imperative in the future. For example, working in a restaurant as a waiter requires capabilities such as attentiveness, teamwork, and socialization. These skills are useful in the university life where you have to make new friends and work together with them. Imagine going into your favourite university but end up being isolated from colleagues instead.
Another merit is that you can become independent. Working as a full-timer keeps you and your family apart. To illustrate this, one of my friends used to be homesick while working as a supermarket clerk. However, he is now accustomed to his college rather than being away from his parents and siblings. Moreover, getting a job before applying university gives you plenty time to pay some universities fees. Therefore, you are not likely to pay off any debt.
On the other hand, however, there are some disadvantages to this which you may not fulfill the major you want to take because the university you are applying may drop the subject. Also, competition between other people may rise. In other words, even if you are eligible to enroll, you could not be accepted by the university because of more intellectual students.
Overall, I think there are pros and cons working in between school and college. However, it is inevitable that obtaining new knowledge and personality are vital for you.
May I know what's the
May I know what's the mistakes so that I can write better next time?
Essay evaluation report
The e-grader gave it a low mark because of the words you used, look:
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
but overall, this is a nice essay.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 285 350
No. of Characters: 1361 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.109 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.775 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.692 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 91 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 46 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 30 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.765 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.449 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.323 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.561 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.187 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ommon nowadays that students work for a period of time instead of going straight to university...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, i think, such as, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1410.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7919860693 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564912280702 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6673764456 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.9411764706 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7647058824 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.23529411765 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153649445349 0.244688304435 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0495096237893 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0379839625591 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0943146026032 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0350082246889 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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