Together with the improvements in society, friendship has played a huge role in people's lives. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether it is imperative to keep your old friends than to make new friends. While it is undeniable that both arguments have their own merit to boast, if forced to choose one over another, my resolute standpoint is definitely in line with making new friends and I think this way for two reasons which I will explain in the following essay.
To begin with, it is beneficial for people to make new friends because they would have many more opportunities to broaden their perspectives. To be specific, people are exposed to a variety of cultures, religions, and personalities when meeting new friends which expand their thoughts and ideas on people's mind and other countries. Should individuals make new friends, they can understand diversity easier and faster. My own experience demonstrates this reality. During my first 2 years in Korean college as an exchange student, I didn't know much about politics. However, when I made new friends there, I could meet people from all over the world who has all different ethnics and culture. Eventually, I was able to know more about the world which helped my college major academically. Such an example demonstrates that making new friends is more vital than previous friends.
Moreover, making new acquaintances helps to release stress because when someone is around, people tend to interact with each other as they get to talk about each other's stories and hobbies. In fact, research conducted by the World Health Organization suggested that when a person is talking to their friend, they tend to forget about the worries and annoying mind. Thus, a person could be healthier and stress-free. Though it may not be the true purpose of its foundation, the person can overcome the difficulty emotionally so that he or she can feel relaxed and calm. Additionally, friends are there to support you and make you enjoy. As a result, the more friends a person makes, the greater the happiness for them. This shows that having a new friend will lead a person to forget about bad memories.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is crucial for people to make new friends because of the reasons stated above. Opinions may vary from people to people, but what does not change is that this topic is something that needs to be mentioned.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...ves. Thus, the question has been raised as to whether it is imperative to keep your old frien...
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Line 3, column 532, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...orean college as an exchange student, I didnt know much about politics. However, when...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, as to, i think, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2005.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91421568627 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67778889999 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551470588235 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.183785796 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.25 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.15 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276220631165 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0899845691366 0.076458572812 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896590592588 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170165301087 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0586938901868 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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