Together with the improvements in society, there has been a significant change in things of my hometown. However, if forced to choose one crucial thing to be changed, my resolute standpoint is in line with building an additional park in my place. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, although my town has a small park, it would be better if a new park is constructed in my town as it helps all the people to keep in shape and maintain a healthy lifestyle which is hard to accomplish due to the over-crowded in the area. In other words, people can exercise regularly without any bustle and hassle. I think that my personal example can shed light on this notion. A couple of years ago when I was working in an industrial factory situated in a rural area, I suffered diabetics which were caused by high cholesterol. However, I was able to reduce it after going to the nearby park where I exercised every morning running for 1 hour. Due to the convenience of the park, I did not have to drive to the city to exercise which takes more than an hour from my house, also giving me plenty of time left to prepare for my work. Furthermore, access to the park in most of the places is free to every resident in the town. Therefore, people do not need to spend any of their money to exercise while in the local gymnastics, all the people have to pay for the facilities and end up spending a lot of money purchasing the membership. It is clear with this example that constructing one more park in my town will benefit more opportunities for people to bulk up.
Moreover, the construction of parks will not only benefit our mental health, but also the environment in the area. Usually, a park is built with a diversity of plants and trees. This allows the surroundings to be clean and eco-friendly which helps the harmful pollutants such as carbon dioxide to be absorbed by trees. Additionally, plants and trees help to preserve animals by providing habitats to them. As a matter of fact, research by the environmental department shows that almost 80% of the species do not die when more parks are built in a city. Should a park is to be created in my town, the geographical features are abundant in my country.
In conclusion, if I could change one thing about my hometown, I would choose to build one more park because such places will give more people plenty of chances to exercise and conserve the ecosystem.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'choosing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'force' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: choosing
...ings of my hometown. However, if forced to choose one crucial thing to be changed, my res...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, i feel, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a matter of fact, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2020.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52914798206 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68424140558 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517937219731 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.2922213085 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.315789474 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4736842105 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203439963089 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0623731598231 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572206323999 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150428504725 0.150856017488 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0560233466167 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 58.1214874552 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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