Some suggest that young people take a job for a few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this.

Nowadays, it is believed by several persons that working over the period after school and before going to university is useful for adolescences. Although, I think that it is a great way of acquiring practical knowledges and particular amount of money, but there also may be certain risks leading to some problems.
On the one hand, there are some advantages of getting a job in an early age. Firstly, it is a financial self-sufficiency that the young are able to provide their needs properly without help of their parents such as food, rent, leisure time costs etc. Secondly, taking up a job forms particular skills and habits including responsibility and time management which are essential factors for their future academic and daily life. At last, it is a career development that working students are one step ahead from their peers.
On the other hand, it is witnessed a few obvious disadvantages that one of them is the generation gap. So that, students who worked after school and entered the university after a while might be forced to study with the lower-aged students who began to tertiary education just after graduating school. Moreover, a break after school can lead to losing some abilities such as reading, writing etc. which are taught at schools and as a result the former students may not show interest toward higher education.
As a conclusion, taking up a job between school and university has a lot of benefits for youths. However, too much brak may discourage them to restart. Thus, in my opinion getting a job for a while before going to university is beneficial under the conditions of keeping themselves in touch with the studies.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, i think, such as, as a result, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1381.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93214285714 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77900060953 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592857142857 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1862623347 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.230769231 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7692307692 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213325453585 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0692381023398 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0551861831721 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118045109003 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246917675558 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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