Sports stars earn large amounts of money and are often given media coverage. Meanwhile, the arts such as music, artwork and plays are neglected. Is it a positive or negative development?
Nowadays, the popularity of sports allows athletes to earn vast amounts of money but skilled artists are ignored. This trend leads to negative impact on individuals as well as the art market.
However, there are also benefits regarding the growth of sports. Since when people do that exercise, they think that it will look great, people tend to mimic popular athletes. This phenomenon encourages them to more healthier by doing exercise. For example, Kim Yeon Ah who is the legend of Olympic in the field of ice skating. In Korea, at that time, a lot of children used to learn ice skating to become like her.
On the one hand, we no longer value artists as highly as we used to be. If people are so enthusiastic about sports, there is a possibility the extent of art market will be reduced. If so, the following generation has a fewer opportunity to experience music, artwork and plays. In addition, sports only provide instant gratification rather than give a deep impression. People need to be cultured because it is an important role in socialising with others as well as their intellectual level goes up. So three types of art above mentioned will help people become refined.
For the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the drawbacks of sports stars' popularity and earning potential over artists outweigh the benefits.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 212, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'healthier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: healthier
...tes. This phenomenon encourages them to more healthier by doing exercise. For example, Kim Yeo...
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Line 3, column 385, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to ice'
Suggestion: to ice
...t time, a lot of children used to learn ice skating to become like her. On the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, regarding, so, thus, well, for example, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1114.0 1615.20841683 69% => OK
No of words: 227.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90748898678 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88156143495 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65174088206 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.68281938326 0.561755894193 122% => OK
syllable_count: 353.7 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5312170967 49.4020404114 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.5714285714 106.682146367 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2142857143 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117426493274 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0365603044078 0.084324248473 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0460276722043 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0820508295136 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623586722522 0.056905535591 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.0946893788 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.9 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.67 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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