Students perform better in school when they are rewarded rather than punished To what extend do you agree or disagree

In recent decades, there have been many debates about the teaching way for students in schools. While some people support the idea that kids will study better if they are rewarded frequently, I would argue that tutors ought to punish the students who make mistakes.
On one hand, after being rewarded, children might have the motivation to try their best in the learning process. First, rewarding or recognizing students' efforts is the best way for teachers to encourage kids to keep studying. In the early ages such as 6 or 7, kids always have creative thinking and being encouraged might make students more confident when illustrating their own ideas. Second, the percentage of students who have mental diseases has increased sharply for ten or twenty years ago. Being rewarded in educated environments leads teenagers more open-mind and get on with their society. Moreover, students' personalities will be developed in a positive way when tutors and friends praise them for their achievements.
On the other hand, sometimes teachers should fine their students who make mistakes. This can be attributed to a host of reasons. The most obvious reason is that when kids handle problems or do some actions in the wrong way, teachers have to show their mistakes and punish them. In fact, after being punished positively, children can improve their skill sets. In addition, punishing is another choice for teachers to lend an ear and give teenagers a hand when their students have trouble. In my opinion, although strict punishment might affect children's mental health, it enhances the thinking of the students.
In conclusion, in recent decades, the way of raising kids has been one of the most attractive issues. It is recommended that students will learn more effectively if they are punished for their mistakes and rewarded for their efforts.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tudents personalities will be developed in a positive way when tutors and friends praise them for...
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... hand when their students have trouble. In my opinion, although strict punishment ...
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...enhances the thinking of the students. In conclusion, in recent decades, the way ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, so, while, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1544.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 301.0 315.596192385 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12956810631 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62075922897 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.554817275748 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 456.3 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.76152304609 231% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.282975312 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8125 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6875 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157625953823 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571865309463 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0447072104561 0.0667982634062 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114047568001 0.151304729494 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0219910807854 0.056905535591 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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