There is no doubt that the way of consuming time is irrefutably one of
the most important parts in the growth of children However an
unfortunate development as of late has been has been that young people
has been wasting lots of their value time, manifesting itself in the
increase of time consumption for television day by day while omitting a
great deal of creativity and active things. This trend can be ascribed to a
host of factors, and an effort of both children and their parents is
instrumental in remedying the situation
There are two main causing rationales behind this trend. First, children’s
TV programs are being broadcasted on every daily basis with some
addictive factors, such as a numerous of colorful cartoons. Cartoon
Network with their vivid long series cartoon perfectly exemplifies the
profound attraction of TV for youth. In other words, children can spend
all their time sitting in front of small screen instead of enjoying physical
activities. Secondly, television do babysitting while parents are
engrossed in earning money to improve their family quality life. For
instance, if a child focus completely on TV, their parents can do some
tasks without any the requirement or crying of the child.
In order to address the problem, several actions can be taken. Firstly,
limiting the screen time of children. Parents can produce a fixed
schedule for their children TV time and make sure that they sticking to
everyday. Another efficient solution is encouraging children enjoying
more creative and outdoor activity. For example, in spare time, parents
and children can play boardgames which could be appeal to children
more than some futile cartoon.
In conclusion the wasting time of young persons can be rooted by an
strong appealing from TV cartoons and a neglect of their parents, this
issue can be tackled with a joint effort of both parents and children.
- Many universities today are offering online courses for students as an alternative of courses delivered on campus Do advantages outweigh of this development disadvantages 56
- Studies have suggested that children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things What are the reasons and what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creativ 67
- Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group while others believe it is better for them to study alone Discuss both views and give your own opinions 67
- Some people think that it is more effective for students to study in a group while others believe it is better for them to study alone Discuss both views and give your own opinions 61
- Studies have suggested that children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things What are the reasons and what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creativ 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 36, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'has been'.
Suggestion: has been
... an unfortunate development as of late has been has been that young people has been wasting lot...
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Line 23, column 1, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...me and make sure that they sticking to everyday. Another efficient solution is encourag...
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Line 28, column 66, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... time of young persons can be rooted by an strong appealing from TV cartoons and ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1631.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 311.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24437299035 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67353241249 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578778135048 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 83.7707494388 49.4020404114 170% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.461538462 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9230769231 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.15384615385 7.06120827912 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 28.0 4.38176352705 639% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.23381027917 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0960000458632 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555824802566 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0622495192288 0.151304729494 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470748105511 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 9.78957915832 301% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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