In this technological era, personal information is held on computers by many companies and organizations. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In this digital age, many firms and organisations save personal information on computers, which is a matter of debate. While there are several advantages, I believe that the disadvantages are more significant.
There are some benefits of creating and maintaining a database of the personal information of users. Companies may provide better services or manufacture the exact products meeting the consumers' demands. Therefore, It is more comfortable for them when using products and services of these companies. For example, they may get the most up-to-date information on the respect they are concerned about anytime they utilize these applications. Moreover, an organization may have a better understanding of its clients by utilizing machine learning and related software, allowing them to have a more consistent number of customers.
Notwithstanding, the drawbacks of this trend far outweigh the positive aspects. Companies may sell this data to advertising enterprises; therefore, they will bombard the users with a huge number of advertisements on all digital media platforms and social networks, which makes them constantly at odds with the Internet. Furthermore, there is a risk of users' confidential materials being compromised, since hackers can take advantage of this data to blackmail users or illegally withdraw money from their bank accounts. Some researches have pointed out that it has just five percent of clients being revealed personal details annually, but it is still a serious problem because most of these people come from rich countries that account for billions of money in international banks.
In conclusion, despite some benefits to consider for both the customers and the companies, the drawbacks in terms of data privacy are more significant. For these reasons, it has better not to adopt the method.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1569.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 282.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56382978723 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13772082686 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602836879433 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1729787765 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.692307692 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.07692307692 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13595072442 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481514771523 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454533198268 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.081202002948 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.058708285703 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.