There are more advertisements aiming at children. Some people believe that they have negative effects on children and should be banned. Do you agree or disagree?
it is claimed that the objective of most of the advertisements nowadays is young children, and many people reflect this is not good for children, therefore, this should be prohibited. In my point of view, such a trend have both positive and negative aspects to children.
Starting with the good sides of the issue, these advertisements will keep children up to date about the new products, toys or services. More selection will be added to the toys wish-lists, so children can find and choose the ones that is the most suitable and favorable to them. advertisements regarding cereal for youngsters can be take as a good illustration for this. With various types of cereal being advertised on tv, children now can choose between those for the one that is most savoury to them or the one which an attractive cover and so on.
Looking at the down sides of such an issue, it can be seen that due to the mass volume of advertisements, more unnecessary things will be purchase. When seeing a commercial on tv, children may insist the parents to purchase those whose appearance extremely attractive on tv. In case of some parents who over-indulge may actually get it for their child, and create an enormous waste if later on, the child tossed it away because there has been a releasing of a newer toy. Furthermore, children may be mislead by certain commercials. To attract more buyers, for example, some producers have inflated the use of their products through commercials. Like drinking milk produced by A company will turn a normal people into a strong person or eating cereals from brand B can make people smarter immediately. Although these just commercial, the majority of children still put faith in those.
In summing up, with regard to all factors mentioned above, I deem that the disadvantages of such issue has outweigh it advantages. By virtue of such, it is my reflection that there should be a limitation on the broadcast of certain commercials targeting children on tv rather than a completely ban.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, therefore, for example, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 343.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90670553936 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30351707066 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87383415106 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583090379009 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.971214448 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.2 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8666666667 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.53333333333 7.06120827912 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262441672352 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916456750927 0.084324248473 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523672099117 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166439882434 0.151304729494 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0660316200839 0.056905535591 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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