There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the use of mobile phones. What form do these problems take? Do problems of using mobile phones outweigh the benefits?
It is true that the use of mobile phones has made fundamental changes in social, medical and technical development. While these digital gadgets bring some potential of benefits for users, I believe that the downside is more significant.
On the one hand, it is apparent that mobile phones have functions that are of great value in some ways. In terms of social communication, cell phones with advances in technology enable people to keep in touch with their family, friends and colleagues more easily by using online applications or social networking sites. For example, Facebook and Twitter are social online platforms in which users are able to send instant messages or enjoy quick chats, minimizing the distance between people. In addition, thanks to the proliferation of the Internet, these mobile phones can be used as learning tools, helping users broaden their knowledge and develop soft skills through online study with English learning courses or other virtual classrooms. Also, with online entertainment channels being available on smart phones, people can spend their time on relaxing after a long hard-working day wherever they are.
However, it seems to me that a range of problems caused by the use of these digital devices are worrying. Firstly, the over-exposure to wireless telephones could exert detrimental effects on users’ health. For instance, there have been numerous young people keeping their eyes glued to mobile screens to play online games or browse Facebook for hours. Consequently, not only can this lead to eye diseases, headaches, but also may cause serious mental health problems. Secondly, the likelihood of people developing a sedentary lifestyle and being isolated from the community is considerably high since the overuse of these wi-fi devices may discourage real interaction. It is common knowledge that entertainment programs on mobile phones is highly addictive, which would make people spend too many hours to play them without frequent face-to-face interactions with the outside world, leading to the downfall of society’s interpersonal communication. Finally, with regard to shortcomings of technology, using mobile phones as a place to keep private documents and a huge amount of personal information would be in dangers of leaking these data.
In conclusion, although there are some benefits of using cell phones, I believe that these are outweighed by other problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, it is true, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2057.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45623342175 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89337278555 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 176.041082164 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602122015915 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.3267465959 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.133333333 106.682146367 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1333333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8666666667 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276348639931 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0902569597667 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0776179621318 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177582403827 0.151304729494 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.021527306766 0.056905535591 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.9 13.0946893788 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 78.4519038076 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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