There is increasing of old people living longer in many countries around the world. Do you think this has a positive or a negative effect on population as a whole?
Since the number of older people in many countries is growing in recent years, this not only leads a merit such sharing of their experiences to young people, but it also brings detrimental effect like the government should provide more budget in order to care them.
One of the mayor advantages of rising a number of the elderly in many countries is that they can share some experiences obtained when they were young. Putting it more simply, the longer people live, the more evidence they get, being a valuable lesson for the young to take beneficial event and to leave detrimental ones. For example, when young generation in Indonesia get married and have long distance relationship due to their jobs, grandparents can give some useful tips for the young to maintain their families. Such wisdom collected from senior people makes the younger have a guidance to solve some problems in their life.
However, the rising of number older people leads a new problem for the governments having to allocate more money to cover their life necessities. When young generations prefer to live in another city and only focus on their job, the governments are forced to take over the responsibilities caring the elderly such as providing residential buildings. Evidence showed that the local government in Surabaya, the capital city of East Java, spent more than 15 billion rupiah just only to build nursing homes for older society during the 2020 periods. As a result, budgets that should be allocated for other aspects like health and infrastructure and education is decreasing.
In conclusion, while growing the number of the elderly enrich wisdom in the society, this leads financial burdens for government. It is suggested for people to have pension plan that can be used when they have retired.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 396, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'distanced'.
Suggestion: distanced
... in Indonesia get married and have long distance relationship due to their jobs, grandpa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 297.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05723905724 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15134772569 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62400835653 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558922558923 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.1759859249 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.545454545 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.7667163134 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0875922212298 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0369553358906 0.084324248473 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346725577774 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.064126047087 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.035027870788 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 9.78957915832 194% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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