These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think it is a positive or a negative development?
Nowadays, people have changed considerably in thinking, lifestyle as well as attitude. Many men accept to stay at home to do housework and take care of their children while women go out to work because of some reasons. In my opinion, it is a negative development.
There are some reasons which causes the situation. Firstly, mothers can earn more money than fathers, so fathers accept to stay at home to take care of their children, which helps mothers concentrate on working. Moreover, many people have changed their thinking about the role of men and women in a family. Men can do housework and women can go out to work while they also receive respect from everyone. Responsibility of fathers and mothers are distributed suitably to bring as many benefits as possible. Besides that, some of fathers love taking care of their children, so they decide to stay at home instead of going to work.
However, I believe that it is a negative development because of some reasons. In the reality, almost men are less careful than women, so they easily make mistakes in looking after their children. For example, many fathers do not discern some small differences in behaviour or attitude of children, therefore they cannot realize that children are sick or feel tired in a fast way. Moreover, it is more suitable to mothers care for girls because they can share and teach girls many things fathers do not know and girls will easily talk to their mother. In addition, if men stay at home to do housework in a long time, they can feel bored and be not freedom. As a result, the relationships in a family will become worse and worse because arguments usually take place.
All in all, the role between fathers and mothers are reversed because of many reasons. If the situation takes place in the long period, it will bring negative effect.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, however, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, in addition, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79245283019 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52866365258 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48427672956 0.561755894193 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 491.4 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.2336678392 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.6470588235 106.682146367 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7058823529 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.23529411765 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376367948046 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116220272589 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950350097968 0.0667982634062 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235501047848 0.151304729494 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0930977652423 0.056905535591 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 13.0946893788 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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