These days young children spend a lot of time using computers tablets and smart phones . Some people think that introducing children to technology at a young age is beneficial .others believe that they would benefit more from playing traditional games. D

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These days young children spend a lot of time using computers tablets and smart phones . Some people think that introducing children to technology at a young age is beneficial .others believe that they would benefit more from playing traditional games.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Technology act as a stepping ston to uplift the standard of people life.Most of younger spend their precious time on technology such as using computer, tablets and smart phones.Few masses think that implement kinder at young is beneficial .Other think that they playing traditional games is more beneficial. I will discuss both views in following pharagraphs.

TO embark with,there are many foldspoints to sore up my views.First and foremost,technology is stuning way to get information because when anyone has a problems with the help of it they can tackle his problems and sought out his querry.For example, when learners have difficulty in their study they can use internet and get idea against problems witb the help of this they can improve their academic score .Moreover,technology provide information about all around the world and other culture.When individuals want to know about other traditions with the help of internet they can collect information technology not only mete out information but also good source of entertainment.

Nevertheless,traditional games have their own significant but nowadays some people forget their traditions and follow western games when we play traditional games then we can save our culture because when masses have information about that games then they can forward their knowledge next generation and culture can not distract their culture .Apart from that ,games is play vital role in people life because children know that games adopt their parents then they play regularly because they respect their olders may they cazy about it when they play games they live hale and hearty along with if one can best in one games he or she promote that game and get name and fame.

To sum with, both ways have equally importance .Therefore,in my point of view technology is good thing to introduceing in youngonce life.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, then, therefore, apart from, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1560.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 298.0 315.596192385 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23489932886 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.15483772266 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07307807214 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.577181208054 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 477.0 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 59.0 20.2975951904 291% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 264.139811464 49.4020404114 535% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 312.0 106.682146367 292% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 59.6 20.7667163134 287% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 20.8 7.06120827912 295% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.01903807615 538% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.201610447207 0.244688304435 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113161221846 0.084324248473 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118760512091 0.0667982634062 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134083720415 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104265904362 0.056905535591 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 33.0 13.0946893788 252% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 11.59 50.2224549098 23% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 26.3 11.3001002004 233% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.17 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.6 10.1190380762 253% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 10.7795591182 241% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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