Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In current society, advertisements are made by distinctive companies to attract the interest and the curiosity of consumers to purchase numerous goods which is not the real demand of consumers. I completely concur with this statement and in this essay I will give my own perspective.
To begin with, a plethora of big organizations or companies often create special offers on a regular basis which is prevalent not only in shops, but also in different social media platforms with distinctive methods including vouchers or discounts in order to stimulate the interest of consumers purchasing their products and seduce a huge number of sponsors into investing because people now tend to purchase stuffs online. A typical example for this is Shoppee which is an online shopping application utilized by many Vietnamese people. It often creates super promotions on 7 July, 8 August and so on, which appeals to the consumer to purchase stuff with the half or cheaper price, compared to the initial price even though they actually do not have any specific purpose to buy it. As a result, The number of products sold brings a large source of revenue which contributes to the development of the social economy.
In another case, there are some people who buy the stuff through the advertisement not because of the promotion or the colorful and vivid designs, but they purchase it due to its essential role in daily life. Take the shampoo as a typical instance, shampoo is a familiar thing with people which is used to clean the hair and the whole body almost everyday and it is divided into many types in order to be appropriate with individual's skin. so if there is no advertisement of shampoo, people will not know the suitable shampoo with themselves
In conclusion, advertisement is a power tool for brands to spread their products but it does not meet all the real demand of consumers. Our real need is more vital than other factors
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...through the advertisement not because of the promotion or the colorful and vivid ...
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...lean the hair and the whole body almost everyday and it is divided into many types in or...
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...o be appropriate with individuals skin. so if there is no advertisement of shampoo...
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...now the suitable shampoo with themselves In conclusion, advertisement is a power ...
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...al need is more vital than other factors
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1608.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 328.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90243902439 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77654700409 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579268292683 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.919225126 49.4020404114 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.8 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.8 20.7667163134 158% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148646294123 0.244688304435 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0608554849759 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042240490993 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0942407360112 0.151304729494 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280041843852 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.0 50.2224549098 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.7795591182 167% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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