Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertisement and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree?
The proliferation of adverts on various goods have given the public the awareness of products on sale or yet to be launched. Though such advertisements are needed for making consumers aware of the launch of products, I believe that commercials provide false hope to customers, inevitably misleading them.
Firstly, advertisements mainly television adverts use the power of propaganda to captivate the eyes of the public using special strategies like appointing a good looking model to a jewellery product using high-end graphic techniques to further enhance the quality of the product making it more vivid and beauteous. Hence, in this regard, advertisements control the perception of the customers which results in the purchase of the product.
Secondly, a major number of the products that are aggrandized contain a lot of misleading information. For instance, Patanjali make tall claims of the various health benefits of their products. But, in actuality, if these products are tested then such highly far-fetched claims will be washed away. Thus, advertisements provide false misconceptions lurimg people to purchase more.
In conclusion, rather than emphasizing on the needs of the society, adverts look to increase sales by strategic use of technology and propagating deceiving truths. An equilibrium must be maintained on supply and demand in order to avoid an economic downfall. It is hoped that, all future commercials will look into the needs of the buyers and maintain consumer harmony.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, hence, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1275.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 232.0 315.596192385 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49568965517 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08449372119 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637931034483 0.561755894193 114% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 506.74238477 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.4772035608 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.909090909 106.682146367 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0909090909 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.54545454545 7.06120827912 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131523892389 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0451284201744 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313270953922 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0771630992209 0.151304729494 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0286816116822 0.056905535591 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.62 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.12 8.58950901804 118% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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