It is not uncommon to see more and more individuals becoming highly acclaimed because of the significant development of the entertainment industry through a various kind of television programs and the internet. In my opinion, I strongly believe that this trend could pose some potential threats on the society, especially in youngsters caused by some following justifications.
First and foremost, there is no doubt that being highly regarded has been being aimed as a top-notch career target of young individuals and this will lead to young people deciding to do both negative and positive things to be well-known. By the impact of famous people on their social media platforms such as Facebook, Tiktok gained a mount of followers, showing their personal opinions about public matters without being professionally trained is able to negatively affect to their young fans. Take Elon Musk as a permanent example, there has been being tons of investors becoming bankrupt due to his investment advises in highly risk financial markets.
Under these circumstances, the restriction of the government plays a vital role in protecting viewers from detrimental effects of well-known individuals. Passing some compulsory classes about morality, professional knowledge should be seen as a fundamental requirement for being able to broadcast or going viral, it is true that educated person is less likely to harmfully influence to their viewers.
In conclusion, although being highly acclaimed is able to help young individuals gain a financial benefit but there also are notable disadvantages. I seriously believe that the nations ought to get involved in the restriction of the entertainment industry
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- Today the internet and TV have created chance for ordinary people to become famous Is it a positive or negative development 61
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 455, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... being professionally trained is able to negatively affect to their young fans. T...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, well, in conclusion, kind of, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1435.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47709923664 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10303465624 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.637404580153 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 49.2539401194 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.444444444 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1111111111 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1111111111 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.09764773596 0.244688304435 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0331807232734 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035873566855 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0466563524938 0.151304729494 31% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386043868803 0.056905535591 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 13.0946893788 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 50.2224549098 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.38 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 9.78957915832 199% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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