TOPIC: It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people compare the value of local history with that of world history and predicate that schoolchildren should prioritize history of their country over others. I completely disagree with that opinion as I believe school history and world history are equally important for students.
On one hand. studying the history of young students’ home country is essential for many reasons. First, it helps to increase the sense of patriotism by learning about the past, especially if that past was involved with loss and sacrifice. Vietnamese students are always proud of the history of Vietnam as our ancestors won several battles, defending against outside intruders and reclaimed sovereignty. Second, learning history helps young generations develop positive interpersonal characteristics. The more students learn about the people, the culture and traditional values, the more they will love the country and be more confident. It is vital for students to feel confident about the community where they are growing up. Consequently, they will begin to feel responsible for the society as well as try to be a better person.
On the other hand, learning the world history is indubitably as important as local history. If students know about histories outside their home countries, they become aware of myriad of knowledge and angles of life. Each country has different obstacles that citizens have to face, influenced by different cultures, religions, demographics, geography etc. For example, the black emancipation which was one of the causes of the Civil war in the US is not a nationally acknowledged problem in Asian countries. Moreover, students from developing countries can learn a lot from the historical downfalls of developed countries. Undoubtedly, developed countries have advanced their economies and infrastructures decades ahead, that being said they have also experienced the obstacles and difficulties that developing countries will have to face. For example, students who have interests in business can find the reasons of the Great Depression valuable for their future careers, It is prominent that students know about the world in order to broaden their horizons perceptually and intellectually.
In conclusion, I believe the significance of domestic and international history should be appreciated equally as they both benefit students in many ways and are not interchangeable. `
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 14, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Studying
...important for students. On one hand. studying the history of young students' hom...
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Line 7, column 103, Rule ID: EQUALLY_AS[1]
Message: Don't say 'equally as'. You can use either 'equally' or 'as' on its own. When comparing two nouns, use 'just as'.
Suggestion: equally; as; just as
...rnational history should be appreciated equally as they both benefit students in many ways...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, if, moreover, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 367.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.58855585831 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37689890912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10269645161 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536784741144 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.941711158 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.944444444 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3888888889 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44444444444 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239019001848 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0827599430043 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0839705323982 0.0667982634062 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.145908006957 0.151304729494 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0818623849741 0.056905535591 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.